Wednesday, February 24, 2010

Intro for Cause Essay (Take 1)

Six foot two inches tall, dark and twisty, English major and so completely mesmerizing that I avoid him like the plague. He kisses me right there in front of hundreds of people in the middle of York Commons and tasting like maple syrup and I hate maple yuck! 40 sets of eyes are staring me down the sweat is dripping from my brow as I shiver as that cold sweat drips down my back and in mid explanation of my description speech on Cardiopulmonary Resuscitation I pass out stone cold on the floor. Yes it was the live site for ITV version of Public Speaking so it is on tape for future generations to laugh at my failure. That girl on the bridge at 1am because she wants to kill herself, that geeky boy they pick on with no friends you sit with at lunch, that guy who smokes and plays guitar and needs to talk about his bad family, the girl who just needs you to type a short paper for her, your brother who is drugged out on acid dives through the plate glass window of your dorm room where you are the R.A. Empathy, love and helping people is one reason you are blocked from reaching your goals. Love or what masquerades as love interrupts your journey of reaching your goals and of course that big dark abyss of fear pulls you down in its clutches until you’re drowning and then you run. Maple syrup man, helpless line of needful people and your empathy for them, and fear these are what stop me from reaching my goals.

1 comment:

  1. Confusing. I like the York Commons ministory. I like the fainting story. I like the list of college kid situations.

    But they don't hook up with each other or with the ending of the graf without a lot of figuring out on the reader's part, without the reader trying to make the links the writer doesn't.

    Stick with 'I' and 'me.' That will be a start to keeping it clear.

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