Graf #8

Graf #8

The Cause Essay’s were very different angles on the same format. The chicken ballerina is almost hiding the 3 reasons for the chicken suit dance and it works well. She easily transitions to the 3 anxieties that have brought the chicken to the dance. The Love Cause Essay is very straightforward in making the format work with 3 causes with a theme sentence under each cause and I of course like this one as I’m drawn to structure. I love to try to squeeze writing, thinking, and life into a perfect box because that is easy for me to make a neat tidy package and I’m going to try to avoid that trap. I like the stopping action format of the Red Sox Cause Essay it works really well and is well written. The idea of the stopped action of the game to explain the dynamic of what it means to the writer and back to the play action is brilliant work. These are three very different takes and will be helpful in guiding me or maybe even leading me astray.

I’m going to try to avoid going the way of the Love Cause Essay because that puts me in my comfortable box and I want to step outside that box. I want a hook but not just a typical planned hook. I want to hook without labeling the three causes and put the three causes in the intro in an embedded form like the chicken dancer. I’m not sure if the chicken ballerina will name the three causes and then strike out we will have to wait and see what transpires. Batter Up!!!